not knocking your call in any way at all,i like the looks of it. but your cadence if not right, JUST my 2 cents. record your calling and listen to it back. best way to set your cadence. If your new to making yelpers get someone that is very good on them to run them and it will help you more then you know.give a few away may sound crazy but i have giving new calls away ever time i make one for feed back on them.